I think it's polltime again.

[chess]

Plot synopses here.
[Poll #66506]

Comments

[painispretty.livejournal.com]

Try a little free-associative writing; sit down with a blank mind and a blank screen/piece of paper and see what comes of it. Perhaps what happens will be applicable to one of the current stories, but it may also spark something utterly unexpected.

[phlebas.livejournal.com]

I'm assuming Haylar:The Novel isn't an option here...

[jaq.livejournal.com]

Graphic Novel, surely?

[firinel.livejournal.com]

you should join NaNoWrimMo (http://www.nanowrimo.com).
2,000 words per day isn't so much.

[passage.livejournal.com]

Umm, yes it is ;-) (well, unless it's the holidays or your unemployed or retired or plan on doing nothing else with the day).

(I figure if the ideas kept flowing and I just kept typing and typing that would still take me close to 2 hours).

Neil

[passage.livejournal.com]

Please, no silly names. There's no way I can take a plot seriously when it sports characters with names like "Firey Horse" and "Roaming Lioness".

Take that out and Grid becomes tolerable.

Thelstory has potential; but you probably need to modify the main character so that
a) we can sympathise with him
b) Kestra can fall in love with him (I'm guessing she wouldn't go for 'an empty world with them as king and queen' if she didn't like the guy)

(Make him more than a murderer, have him instead a protector, have him speak to the trees and weep at their loss. Give the trees voices (hey, it worked well in LotR) which most people can't hear. Have him start by trying to reason with the people cutting down the forests. Make their leader thoughly horrible.)

To be blunt Ka'rsi Nightclaw and Talia both sound pretty sucky from the synopsises.

The start of Kisra had potential. The first book even. But marrying a rat? No, I don't see that one.

"Who do you want to be today?" sounds very, very different from anything you've ever written. That might be good, or it might be bad (but I suspect the former requires significant changes in writing style and subject).

"Time Horizon" sounds too confused. It has some nice ideas, but I can't figure out what the climax of the plot really is. The super alien things feels too bolted on.

(And yes folks, sometimes I do say nice things about her writing. Hey ... I couldn't persuade you to carry on with Tina could I?)

Neil

[chess]

Uhm, Jarrin's human - where did you get the idea he was a ksria-ksrii from?

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[firinel.livejournal.com]

Someone who has one this before figures that it takes about 2-3 hours a day.

and the person is fully gainfully employed, is a parent, and successfully married. and has managed it.

[passage.livejournal.com]

Yes, and Yasmin's a rat. Now I know we males get desperate but there are limits ...

(Yasmin was meant to be a ksria-ksrii)

Neil

[painispretty.livejournal.com]

No, it isn't. Unless you have a stinking evil case of writer's block.

[pacx.livejournal.com]

ooh, me like! me want!

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[firinel.livejournal.com]

yes, definately.
then 50 words is painful.

[chess]

Uhm... read the first part more carefully :). The ksria decide that humans make better pairings, hence why the humans don't like them that much.

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[painispretty.livejournal.com]

d00d, at the moment FIVE words is like shitting porcupines. *cries*

[phlebas.livejournal.com]

I liked the "Her daughter runs away to another planet to find some people who'll notice her" bit of the Talia synopsis.